Just a suggestion to perhaps improve your beginning - you started off by talking about two different incidents. I think it might sound better if you link these two events by saying something like, "In both of these instances, the situation would have been better if..."
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ReplyDeleteJust a suggestion to perhaps improve your beginning - you started off by talking about two different incidents. I think it might sound better if you link these two events by saying something like, "In both of these instances, the situation would have been better if..."